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UdubBadger · 05-04-2010, 12:03 PM

What else can I do to this to edit this any better?

d3UCE818 · 05-04-2010, 12:28 PM

i like it, i dont think it needs any more editting

M_Six · 05-04-2010, 01:37 PM

Dump the background, maybe. Something like a nice gray-to-white fade.

UdubBadger · 05-04-2010, 01:43 PM

interesting idea...

UdubBadger · 05-04-2010, 02:55 PM

Better/Worse/The Same/Needs More Work?

InsaneSkippy · 05-04-2010, 02:58 PM

I like the original more..

Also maybe try removing the key hole under the 335i badge.

rodi · 05-04-2010, 03:14 PM

kill that hard USM. it's wretched.
the grey-to-white bg is a good idea, but then smooth out the reflections in the paint.
try making the gradient fall off late, vertically. about 1/4 way up from the bottom.

and add more grain. :]

UdubBadger · 05-04-2010, 03:27 PM

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Originally Posted by InsaneSkippy

I like the original more..

Also maybe try removing the key hole under the 335i badge.

not into chopping out things on the car... if its a background or reflection thats 1 thing. Removing something we all know is on the car and is on EVERY 335i out there is another.

radiantm3 · 05-04-2010, 08:04 PM

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Originally Posted by UdubBadger

not into chopping out things on the car... if its a background or reflection thats 1 thing. Removing something we all know is on the car and is on EVERY 335i out there is another.

If it was an advertising piece, I'd be willing to bet they would remove that keyhole. It's distracting to the image.

UdubBadger · 05-04-2010, 08:10 PM

maybe maybe not but it's just a photo from a semi pro student so I'm not gonna bother

Memphis1 · 05-04-2010, 11:14 PM

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Originally Posted by UdubBadger

What else can I do to this to edit this any better?

looks cool! have fun with it.

oneintheory · 05-04-2010, 11:22 PM

i hate the dark fade on the trunklid.
i like the background, though. it provides a good contrast to the lack of color on the car.
the sharpness is spot on, as well.

basically, i second rodi. except i say keep the background.

ichiban · 05-04-2010, 11:59 PM

halo in the original looks bad imo. Other than that, it is visually pleasing.

UdubBadger · 05-05-2010, 12:17 AM

halo is a biproduct of the LucisArt software didn't even think it was very noticable in the original. I added the outter glow in the 2nd edit

UdubBadger · 05-05-2010, 12:19 AM

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Originally Posted by oneintheory

i hate the dark fade on the trunklid.
i like the background, though. it provides a good contrast to the lack of color on the car.
the sharpness is spot on, as well.

basically, i second rodi. except i say keep the background.

the dark fade is also part of the 3d tonemapping software. I know I could adjust it pre-LucisArt but I'm still kinda a fan of natural shadows and highlights as they were on scene. I know on a professional level if this was an ad it probably wouldn't fly but it's not so I'll call it "artsy" and keep it.

kamek · 05-12-2010, 11:57 PM

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Originally Posted by radiantm3

If it was an advertising piece, I'd be willing to bet they would remove that keyhole. It's distracting to the image.

+1

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Originally Posted by UdubBadger

maybe maybe not but it's just a photo from a semi pro student so I'm not gonna bother

What defines you as "semi-pro?" Just curious...

UdubBadger · 05-13-2010, 12:46 AM

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Originally Posted by kamek

+1

What defines you as "semi-pro?" Just curious...

I've been paid to shoot and I own decent equipment... more than a recreational/amature photog would but not as much or as nice as a pro. I realize anyone can own anything without having any skill but I just mean it in the sense that I've invested a little bit into having quality equipment because I'm more serious about it than your average person.

Mr Tonka · 05-13-2010, 01:07 AM

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Originally Posted by ichiban

halo in the original looks bad imo. Other than that, it is visually pleasing.

Agree, that's my only gripe.

Mr Tonka · 05-13-2010, 01:09 AM

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Originally Posted by UdubBadger

I've been paid to shoot and I own decent equipment... more than a recreational/amature photog would but not as much or as nice as a pro. I realize anyone can own anything without having any skill but I just mean it in the sense that I've invested a little bit into having quality equipment because I'm more serious about it than your average person.

Hey I guess i'm semi pro too!!

UdubBadger · 05-13-2010, 01:33 AM

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Originally Posted by MP0WER

Hey I guess i'm semi pro too!!

I'm pretty sure like 80% of us who frequent this section are basically semi pro if not pro.

UdubBadger · 05-13-2010, 01:34 AM

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Originally Posted by MP0WER

Agree, that's my only gripe.

where is the halo? I only see the vignetting.

EDIT: ok forget it now I see... it's like blown out really close to the edge of the car. Didn't notice that until I'm looking at it on my big iMac not the little Macbook.

jc_lbc · 05-13-2010, 02:53 AM

My suggestion would be to remove the reflections from the car. On the right side, I'd also add a bit of vignetting, a little more blur, and de-saturate the background a bit. The focal point of the photo appears to be the tail-light assembly and the green/red thing going on next to it is taking away from the nice lines in your pic. I'd also fix the schmutz (I guess its some water?) along the edge of the trunk lid and the right edge above the light.

I like the heavy sharpening and I actually light the little bit of glow you've got going on.

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oneintheory no longer a BMW owner 172 Rep 1,463 Posts Drives: 2011 Ford Edge Sport Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Suffolk/Chesapeake, VA iTrader: (0)	i hate the dark fade on the trunklid. i like the background, though. it provides a good contrast to the lack of color on the car. the sharpness is spot on, as well. basically, i second rodi. except i say keep the background.
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jc_lbc Private First Class 5 Rep 189 Posts Drives: 318ti Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: Long Beach, CA iTrader: (0)	My suggestion would be to remove the reflections from the car. On the right side, I'd also add a bit of vignetting, a little more blur, and de-saturate the background a bit. The focal point of the photo appears to be the tail-light assembly and the green/red thing going on next to it is taking away from the nice lines in your pic. I'd also fix the schmutz (I guess its some water?) along the edge of the trunk lid and the right edge above the light. I like the heavy sharpening and I actually light the little bit of glow you've got going on.
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